This post is a basic construct of the script i will be using for my film.
The two man are robbing the house, both are becoming quite nervous as the exchange a few lines of dialogue
T – How much longer?
A – its gonna be ten more minutes (aggravated)
T – I can hear sirens comin’
I constructed the script for this scene for a few reasons, firstly the quick and snappy dialogue reflected the fast pace of the first scene i felt that it reflected the thieves plan get in and out as quickly as possible so in order to show this to the audience i decided to make the dialogue short and to the point. I also constructed it this way to further play on the tension that comes with robbery or any crime, by speeding up the rate of the response from each of the characters combined with the tense and edgy acting i felt that the dialogue successfully created tension.
The detective calls for backup and meets Thunder Eagle
A – we need back up, its a robbery!
E – you called
A – i knew they’d send the best
E – whats the situation?
A – its a robbery!
E – gimme thirty seconds
This section of dialogue was constructed in order to reflect the control thunder eagle has and the power he holds, and similarly the way he exerts his power. To achieve this is constructed the dialogue in this scene to make thunder eagle appear as a relaxed super cop who doesn’t need a lot of information to act, i feel that this conversation reflected the slick cooperation between the police force and thunder eagle and how organised each of the members are this can be seen in the section after the first high five. Contrasting with the sloppy conversation that occurred between the robbers, i feel that the conversation between the police and thunder eagle was successful at constructing the police and thunder eagle as in control of the situation.
Narrative section – this is the section of the film that explains Thunder Eagles origin,the narrative explains how thunder eagle came to be and will cover a 1/2 of the duration of the film.
“That’s me, my names thunder eagle. Before i was a super cop i was just an ordinary citizen on his way home from work. One day, at the height of a gang war between L.A. ‘s most notorious gangs the crypts kings and the latina crowns, i was attacked whilst taking a stroll under the over pass in Latina territory. Anyway, as part of some initiation test these two thugs had to rob an innocent civilian to prove their worth, (pause) i suppose it poetic justice ha. As i was on my death bed i was stuck by lightning which shocked my heart in to action, keeping me alive long enough for the medical services to arrive. An old friend from nam heard of what happened and called in a favour, as the technology to save me hadn’t been invented yet i had to wait, so i was put on a trial for cryogenic storage to await the day that technology would finally catch up. 40 years on and i was re-awoken only to find that the world had fallen into a lawless pit. I swore on that day that with my new bionic eye and metal bones that i would clean the streets and rid this world of injustice. Its that day that i became THUNDER EAGLE!”